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 Completing my PhD degree is the most intellectually challenging %% FUCK OFF ZERNIKE POLYNOMIALS WERE MORE DIFFICULT --- and actually useful unlike set theory
 activity of my first 52 years of my life!                       %% SET THEORY IS A LOAD OF BOLLOCKS
 %
-The best and worst moments of my doctoral journey 
+The best and worst moments of this  journey 
 have been shared with many people. 
 %
 It has been a great privilege to spend several years 
 visiting the Mathematics and Engineering departments of 
-the University of Brighton, 
-and its members will always remain dear to me.
+the University of Brighton, pushing me forward in clarity of self-expression,
+precision through mathematics, critical assessment and carefully crafted English,
+its members will always remain dear to me.
 %
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 My first debt of gratitude must go to my supervisors, 
@@ -30,6 +31,7 @@ who explained that the chapter in my project documentation postulating a modular
 FMEA---which had obvious potential for making FMEA
 more efficient---was a concept worthy of being developed for a PhD and assisting  me
 to submit this as a conference paper~\cite{Clark200519}.
+%
 Further I thank her for encouraging me to apply for the PhD. %% PITY SHE DID NOT STAY ON AS MY PHD SUPERVISOR
 %
 
@@ -40,7 +42,24 @@ afternoons to pursue my studies.
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 At Energy Technology Control, the following people gave encouragement, and
 validated the concepts for modular FMEA that I was proposing, Martin~Thirsk, Colin~Talmay,
-Darren~Legge and Hazel~Anderson. 
+Darren~Legge and Hazel~Anderson. The environment and context of the work there
+was very useful for clarifying concepts relating to FMEA and 
+safety, at least once a week there would be a new practical case study arising
+and being discussed, be it the observability of the effect of failures in an amplifier,
+or how a particular sensor could fail. 
+%
+The field of industrial burner control
+is rich with practical examples that my new methodology have been % be
+applied to and thus the theoretical aspects were often
+sounded out  against `real~world' problems.
+%
+These real~world failure scenarios were reflected in the 
+design documentation, often submitted in support of 
+safety accreditation, that I am tasked to produce there.
+%
+Again I thank energy Technology control Ltd, for giving me
+these parallel tasks, which aided my studies.
+
 %
 These Engineers, whose whole careers
 have been focused on the safety critical electronic/computing area,